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Wasn't Born an Angel - Comments, page 9

Your dialogue for the characters is so authentic! I can picture them all saying that. You got Merle spot on. Amazing job :)

Isabella Isabella
9/14/14

Great story!!! :) I can't wait for when you post again! :) Hope they find each other soon :)

#65346 #65346
9/13/14

Lovely chap hun...to tell ya, when i saw it was just a beth chao i was a little iffy but you did well :) descriptions were awesome...hope they find each other soon :)

MerlesRightHand MerlesRightHand
9/13/14

@MerlesRightHand

Beth and Daryl...they won't be apart for long...physically separated that is!

Aireabella Aireabella
9/9/14

@#65154

Thanks so much for your comment about this story and "I Will Follow...". Your comment about a book and my writing...that means a lot! I write some of my own original work, but I am far too self-conscious about any of my writing to actually put myself out there with anything original. I fight myself a lot with my fan fics (especially "I Will Follow...", just because that one is so much more established), having internal struggles over whether I want to write what I know readers probably want or keeping the story line how I envision it . So far I've won, but I can't imagine submitting an original work to an editor to tear it apart...and the thought of publishing something people would hate...*shudders*...that would destroy me! Thanks for your review and kind comments though!

Aireabella Aireabella
9/9/14

@bbhlvr64

Thanks as always! I'm super happy to be your new obsession! I'm getting to the end of "I Will Follow You Into the Dark"? That saddens me to even think about...I don't think I'm ready to quit on that one yet! The thing is, I am kind of viewing that one as an ongoing project. There is a certain point I know that I am going to get to that will be kind of a shift...a new chapter for Beth and Daryl...and I was planning on ending "I Will Follow..." and starting a sequel, but I think I have decided against it. I really think the title and it's meaning will play a part in what I have planned moving forward, so even though "I Will Follow..." may get really long, I think I want to stick with it. I have a lot of ideas, so like I said...I am viewing it as an ongoing project. It will probably be around until I feel the story has ended, my writing becomes too poor in my opinion, everyone abandons it, or if it gets like a negative 25 rating on this site!

Aireabella Aireabella
9/9/14

Great story! I'm hoping they don't spend too much time a part... I need the together! :D Update soon, yah?

I love this story. And I love 'I will follow you...' as well. Both stories are very well written. If you ever write a book I'll definately buy it. Really love your style. I hope your muse won't leave you and you'll update soon because I can't wait for the next chapter.

cccGlenisla cccGlenisla
9/8/14

Thank for the new chapter. I think I have a new obsession. Which is good because, I know you are getting to the end of "I will follow you into the dark". I wasn't sure what I was going to do with myself when that one ended;) I loved that last chapter too...

bbhlvr64 bbhlvr64
9/7/14

@HeartsandDaggers
Thanks for giving this story a chance despite your misgivings because of the rating! I'm glad you did! Also, thank you for the reviews. You are the second person who has mentioned Merle being well written. I am not really all that attached to his character, so if it turned out for people who like him, I'm happy!

Aireabella Aireabella
8/31/14

@bbhlvr64

Wow...thanks for the comments on this chapter. I am really trying to keep Daryl wanting to keep his feelings to himself in regards to the group but becoming okay with having the feelings though. The result...when he's angry or upset, he's pretty transparent. Also, thanks for the kind words on "I Will Follow You Into the Dark". That one, it's funny, because I'm so invested in it, I am always afraid to screw it up. You know, like if I make one misstep, everyone will abandon it! From the beginning, I have always been really self-conscious about it, and now, every time I post a chapter, that anxiety gets even worse because the story is so much more established! It's my baby! As far as the wait being as bad as the wait for season 5...I don't know...nothing entertainment wise is as bad for me as waiting for season 5! It has been a long (over) 5 months!

Aireabella Aireabella
8/31/14

@DiamondDove

I'm glad you liked how I wrote Merle! I didn't think he was that great, but who am I to say?

Aireabella Aireabella
8/31/14

*Sob* Daryl blames himself for everything-feels like he left her-and he's lashing out at everyone else. That is so him. I love how you carefully made sure that no one said Beth's name but it's the one thing he wants to hear. Then he confesses that he feel-it's beautiful! Update soon please!

DiamondDove DiamondDove
8/31/14

You've got Daryl's character pegged perfectly in this chapter. Daryl torturing himself internally but calling out Maggie and Glenn, well, I can't say he didn't have the right to! I loved him trying to get Maggie to say Beth's name then just basically saying f*** it! By the way, I had to look up the song you mentioned and it totally fits! To be serious, I hit random on this site, looking for a new Beth/Daryl fic and this was the first one that came up. I saw the rating and almost didn't read it. I decided to give it a chance just because I thought the title sounded interesting. I'm so glad I did! Now I'm going to be waiting for the next chapter! I guess I'm going to have to check out your other story you mentioned and hope it is as good as this one. I don't get the low rating on this!

Um, chapter 3 was like absolutely perfect! You're Merle, he was Merle. You've got a great handle on writing these characters. That ending was heartbreaking. ''He had to be gentle. He didn't have it in him to hurt her" even though she was dead. Wow.

Chapter 1 with Beth was DARK! Poor Beth. And chapter 2 shows Daryl how I want him to feel about Beth. The part of Rick with Daryl really seem to be in character for both. Love it!

@Aireabella
Love it. Loved this chapter. "Not that he felt it, just that he said it"' Perfect!
"I will follow you into the dark" is such a great story. I hang on every word. Im like a kid waiting for Santa between each chapter. It is as bad as waiting for season 5. You are a great writer. I look forward to the next chapter of both stories...

bbhlvr64 bbhlvr64
8/29/14

That was a brutal chapter. So sad! BTW, I love you're Merle! Either you need to write Merle into this more or write a Merle story. It would be awesome!

DiamondDove DiamondDove
8/23/14

@DiamondDove

That line you mentioned, "an entire lifetime between 'I was with Beth and she's just gone'", that is really how I viewed the moment where Daryl and Rick were talking about Daryl ending up with Joe's group. Just the way Daryl looked, how he paused between every line, it was like he was remembering all the moments, everything that happened, everything he lost when Beth was stolen. I might be delusional, but that is what I saw in my head!

Aireabella Aireabella
8/18/14

@Karoliina

Thanks for your review. I might have chapter 3 up in a few days, maybe a little less than a week! It just all depends!

Aireabella Aireabella
8/18/14